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  1. UnknownSeptember 17, 2018 at 11:12 PM

    Hi Jonah,

    Overall, I really like your paper on the writing in the field of engineering. You provide very good examples of the academic writing along with the purpose. However, there are a few parts where I get a little confused. One is the use of a "+" after a period. It's the first time I've ever seen it being used in a paper. Another one would be the "most" on the 2nd sentence of "Language", I believe that it should be changed to "mostly". I believe that there should be a Running head on the upper left hand corner of your paper along with a simplified title. Other than those, I really like the way how you organized your paper. There's a good topic sentence in each paragraph, and you do very well adding information to explain your points.

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